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The Last Cutie Mark Crusader 1, Part 1 of 3

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Cloudsdale Cadets

The start whistle blasted, shattering the calm of a spring day filled with puffy, white clouds lazily floating by. Before the echo even thought about subsiding, a hundred Pegasus ponies shot off from the starting line faster than lightning fills the sky. They were hurtling through an obstacle course at break-neck speed, dodging hoops, flying around markers, occasionally colliding, sending one or both parties spiraling to the cloud floor of the arena. Barely stopping to see if they were hurt, they would shoot back into the air, trying to regain lost time.

At twenty-first position, Scootaloo's wings were beating the air furiously. Her eyes were aflame with unbridled desire for victory. She zipped around a marker, through a hoop, and then a drop. She shot into twentieth, and then nineteenth position. She knew she didn't have much more, and she wasn't sure whether wanting to be first more than anybody else could help close the gap, but there wasn't time to think about that just now.

One of the ponies ahead, probably in the top ten, lost control and caused an accident. He spun wildly, unintentionally kicking one of the other racers as they attempted to pass. A third racer was caught in the fray as she tried to fly underneath them. All three spiraled down. That quickly, Scootaloo was in sixteenth position. She felt a little tired from the effort already, but pressed, passing another pony that slowed down from fatigue; fifteenth position now.

Scootaloo tried to focus on her breathing. With this kind of athletic exertion, not breathing properly is all it takes to send you falling to the deck. Inhale, hold it, exhale, hold it, inhale... It was an interesting rhythm, the breathing and the beating of the wings. They would synchronize when she paced herself. Her thoughts were broken as they came around the last sharp turn to the straightaway.

Every pony in front of her wasn't going to give up or make a mistake at this point. As Scootaloo rounded the turn, she shot ahead as fast as her wings would carry her. All of the others were sprinting as well, but this was Scootaloo's strength as a flier. Fourteenth position. Others were much more maneuverable, which is why she hadn't caught them yet, thirteenth, twelfth, but Scootaloo may have been the fastest of them all on a straightaway. Eleventh position, and still she pressed on. Tenth, and as Scootaloo shot into ninth position, she realized that her breathing was not synchronized, and she was becoming winded.

She ignored her body crying for rest, and decided to press to the finish line; she could see it. She put everything she had into a final burst of speed. Eighth place, seventh, sixth; she could see the dumbfounded expressions on the other ponies faces as she left them behind. Fifth, fourth; this was almost too easy. Third, second, and finally she achieved first place! All that was left was to maintain speed until...
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Equestria is at war. The land is plagued by an unending horde of timberwolves that pour out of the Everfree Forest. Cities have fallen, and it seems everypony is powerless to end the slaughter. The call has gone out for all ponies to rise up to defend Equestria. Scootaloo was one of the first to enlist. Can the timberwolves be stopped through military force? By the time they are, will Equestria even be recognizable?

This story contains action, violence, and a strongly implied threat of rape.


So, from the outset of this adventure, there are already differences from the source material. When I began, I didn't realize that Scootaloo is apparently supposed to be crippled. It wasn't something they really dealt with yet, except that they don't know if she'll ever fly. Well, in this version, she learned to eventually. Also, as of the last episode, she did finally get her cutie mark. In this story, she never got it.

So, think of this story as a what if...
What if Scootaloo eventually learned to fly, but never got her cutie mark?
What if through the course of time, life choice gradually separated the mane six?
What if hordes of timberwolves began pouring out of the Everfree Forest one day?
What if the only way to stop them was to fight a war?
What if this story wasn't written for children?

Anyway, enough editorializing.

Music Recommendation:  www.youtube.com/watch?v=RtHJ8l…

The cover art was created by the talented :iconthecrochetdragon:


Feel free to leave creative or clever comments below. What do you like, what don't you like? Constructive criticism is always appreciated. :) (Smile)


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Prologue:  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 01:  Cloudsdale Cadets  YOU ARE HERE
Chapter 02:  Attack on Canterlot  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 03:  Rest  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 04:  Recovery  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 05:  The Forging of an Elite Squad  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 06:  The Ponyville Library  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 07:  Into the Everfree Forest  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 08:  No Rest for the Weary  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 09:  Attack Underground  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 10:  Overwhelmed  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 11:  Siege  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 12:  Fallout  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 13:  Changing of the Guard  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 14:  Loss  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 15:  Gain  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 16:  Injustice  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 17:  Strategies  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 18:  Campaign  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 19:  Recruits  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 20:  Revolution  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 21:  Discovery  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 22:  Bonds  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 23:  Quarantine  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 24:  Reassignments  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 25:  Preparations  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 26:  Coup d'état  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 27:  Aftermath  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 28:  Taskforce  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 29:  Trail  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 30:  Symbiosis  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 31:  Raid  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 32:  Glory  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 33:  Darkness  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 34:  Gathering  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 35:  Games  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 36:  Death  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 37:  Faux Pas  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 38:  Countermeasures  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 39:  Devotion  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 40:  Catharsis  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Chapter 41:  Resolutions  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…
Epilogue:  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/The…


Other creative endeavors which I have written or to which I've contributed...
The Forgotten:  jatheus.deviantart.com/journal…
Sweetie Belle's First Time:  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/Swe…
Rarity's Hearts and Hooves Daysaster:  jatheus.deviantart.com/art/Rar…
Screen It or Stream It?:  www.youtube.com/playlist?list=…
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Cliff hangers man xD